The follow post contains content extracted from a proposal project which written in a group. The other group members consist of Eunice Siow, Darrell Lin and Benjamin Heng.
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Personal Statement
As a student who relies heavily on public transport and commutes to school via train every day, I have encountered train disruptions several times. It is understandable that disruptions due to the wear and tear of the railway parts are unavoidable as the trains have been running more frequent services in the recent years. This project will allow me to suggest new strategies and improvements to the current travel contingency plans from the commuters’ perspective.
Hi Louise,
ReplyDeleteYou may want to focus the personal statement with a vision of the proposal with yourself as an engineering student also. Overall it looks all right, maybe it is lacking in some important points of why you are working on this proposal.
You may want to give it a thought. Im just sharing what I feel may be missing.
Cheers!